アラフィフ英作文 ' Find new myself '

 アラフィフ英作文、今回は ' Find new myself ' です。

こちらで生活している日本人が、みんなとても明るくて積極的で、それが新鮮に見えて、その印象を書きました。

赤文字が先生に添削してもらった箇所です。

There is something I am wondering.

Why do many Japanese people who are staying abroad look so bright and energetic?

They laugh a lot, are eloquent, and have very emotional expression.

As you know, Japanese have poor emotional expression and do not positively say their own opinion.

I visited in Ireland 3 times, last year I stayed for two weeks,

As a result of my observation through these stay(not only in Ireland but also in other countries)

As far as I can tell, almost all Japanese (mainly international students) living in Ireland are much more energetic than the average Japanese.

In my opinion, it may be because they have left Japan and have been released from invisible customs and pressure in Japan.

There is a lot of peer pressure in Japan.

And, first of all, it might be because they were inspired by the expansive landscape and openminded national character. They discovered their new selvs in Ireland.

of course I know it is dangerous to generalize the things in one of the typicalnational character

In any case, I think it is a valuable experience for many Japanese people in abroad to find themselves different the way from the way they are in Japan.

What kind of myself will I find?